Amanda murder edit

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Brief grammar notes

Re-enter/re-educated must have a hyphen, as well as words whose meanings would change without the hyphen (re-sign).

two lunches

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Grammar

Weiss is going to become a Ninja of hand-calling.

When two nouns are connected by “or”, the adjective that follows refers to the noun closest.

“Different than”, not “Different from”.

Exfoliate-  Pore cleansing
Defoliate- Leaf remova

Materiel- French term refering to war technology.

One and the same- idiomatic expression meaning two things that are equal.

Subjunctive- Also known as the counter-factual, the subjunctive is used if there is a doubt. 
e.g. If I were rich, I would have a lot of money.  However, I am not. 
If there once was doubt, but the doubt has been removed, it would revert to the past.
e.g. If I was broke before the promotion, I’m most certainly not now.
If there was a typo, it’s already been fixed.

Use whoever as a subject and whomever as the object.  However, if a sentence need both a subject and an object, the subject takes precedent.

Second draft Lunch editorial

two lunches revised

I might need to borrow Rachel’s Phillip quotes if they haven’t already been used in a news piece.

Lauren AP edit

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Good job.  You have a lot of excellent content, and awesome quotes.  I may have gotten a bit carried away just now with the edits, so if you preferred anything that you had originally, just change it back.  Or if you don’t like the way I voiced stuff, put it in your own words.

two lunches redo

Two Lunches

WHOA! No school Monday

Guess there’s nothing to do but go to a bar and get drunk I guess.

DELETE.

Lunch Editorial First Draft

lunch editorial first draft

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